Thursday, December 6, 2007

Beach Walk Haiku

I record their trace--
A dog, a runner, bare feet--
Wave erases all.

Note: Originally I posted the final word in this haiku as "it." But "it" just sounded like a bad note to me, clunking at the end. So a few days later I changed "it" to "all." Better...but I'm still a little unsatisfied. Anyone else have a suggestion?

1 comment:

Caroline said...

Lovely! (You make me want to go for a run on the beach tomorrow!)